Saturday, December 17, 2011

What do you think of the beginning of my story?

I personally would read more. I cant speak for others though. I believe you spent a little bit too much time describing the trees but you did tie everything together very nicely. Your wording deserves you a gold star in my book. Also you have the ability to spark the readers attention especially by mentioning Ezra in the very first line and then dropping the subject.

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